The story also needs more visuals, that is why people get bored with the story. Milf sex I give the story a 7 more if he would have described better.READERReport 2006-01-01 21:30:28great story. What do they look like, what color is the tent, are they in the mountains of Tennessee, or the Texas hill country, give us something to see. Who wears a bra to bed? No ass fuck. They went back into the tent, how did they end up on the grass. Who wears a bra to bed? to paraphrase St Bobo, erotica is pretty straight forward, its all about setting, characters, and descriptions. to paraphrase St Bobo, erotica is pretty straight forward, its all about setting, characters, and descriptions. No ass fuck. What do they look like, what color is the tent, are they in the mountains of Tennessee, or the Texas hill country, give us something to see. 1/10READERReport 2005-09-07 09:13:23Hannah, you have a pretty good geasp of the language but the inconsistancies hurt the story. 10 comments«12»READERReport 2006-10-12 22:57:10Now what is it about a good slow fuck between
